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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. X5NO
The diagram depicts the how the unemployment rate was in Australia over a particular year. In Rural Areas, The unemployment percentage is reduced from 7% to nearly 5% untill mid of the second quarter. Afterwards, It has been increased around half percent in the third quarter. In between the third and fourth quarter, The job less percentage remains constant with slight variation in the percentage. But in Urban Areas, In the fourth quarter, it has reached the highest level with percentage of nearly five as it compared to other previous quarters. In the third quarter, it has been noticed the unemployment rate is touched the lowest ever possible in the year 2012 but then after it started increasing. The first highest percentage excluding the fourth quarter is noticed in the second quarter of the year. In the middle of the third and fourth quarter, there were ups and downs. Then the rate of unemployment started climbing towards the top. At the end of the year, In both rural and urban areas have almost with the same percentage of unemployment is identified.
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rate was in Australia over a particular year.

In Rural Areas, The
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, The job less
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remains constant with slight variation in the percentage.

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. In the third
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then after it
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of the year. In the middle of the third and
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, there were ups and downs. Then the rate of
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of the year, In both rural and urban areas have almost with the same
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IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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