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The chart shows the consumer durables of britain from 1972 to 1983.write a report for a university lecturer describing information shown below.

The chart shows the consumer durables of britain from 1972 to 1983. write a report for a university lecturer describing information shown below. BY7bd
The chart described above shows the percentage of people in Britain owns various household items from year 1972 to 1983. Durables like television, dishwasher, etc are shown in the chart. According to the chart it seems that people did not use video till 1983 and dishwasher till 1978. So we can say that these were not invented before these years. While maximum number of people owned items like television, vacuum cleaner, refrigerator and washing machine. The data also tells us that it has been consistent increase in purchase of the above listed items where the only exception in the list is vacuum cleaner because surprisingly there were zero percent sales of it in year 1983. Also on making an individual observation on particular items we see that entertainment overcomes essentials as we see that television holds prominent among the other followed by vacuum cleaner. To conclusion we can say that in these global world people are interested in easy and fast going products si on an estimation central heating, dishwasher and vacuum cleaner may have increase in sales over the Britain.
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shows
the percentage of
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people
in Britain
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owns
various household
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items
from year 1972 to 1983. Durables like television, dishwasher, etc
are shown
in the chart.

According to the chart it seems that
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people
did not
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use
video till 1983 and dishwasher till 1978.
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we can say that these were not invented
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before
these years. While maximum number of
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people
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owned
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items
like television,
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vacuum
cleaner, refrigerator and washing machine. The data
also
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tells
us that it has been consistent increase in
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purchase
of the above listed
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items
where the
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only
exception in the list is
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vacuum
cleaner
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because
surprisingly
there were zero percent sales of it in year 1983.

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on making an individual observation on particular
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items
we
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that entertainment overcomes essentials as we
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see
that television holds prominent among the other followed by
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vacuum
cleaner.

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conclusion we
can say that in these global world
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people
are interested
in easy and
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fast
going products
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on an estimation central heating, dishwasher and
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vacuum
cleaner may have increase in sales over the Britain.
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IELTS academic The chart shows the consumer durables of britain from 1972 to 1983. write a report for a university lecturer describing information shown below.

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181 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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