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The chart represent the information of how the global water is allocated and the table illustrates the proportion of water usage in agriculture, domestic, and industry from three different countries-including China, India, and the UAE.

The chart represent the information of how the global water is allocated and the table illustrates the proportion of water usage in agriculture, domestic, and industry from three different countries-including China, India, and the UAE. ew5DW
The chart represent the information of how the global water is allocated and the table illustrates the proportion of water usage in agriculture, domestic, and industry from three different countries-including China, India, and the UAE. In general overview, majority of the water are occupied by salt water and only 5% is fresh water. And mainly the water was used for agriculture in China while the major of water consumption is in the UAE. According to the information, 75% of fresh water come from ice and glaciers compare to ground water which only comprising for almost one-third of fresh water and surface water is the least part with only 2%. It can be seen that most of water is used in agriculture according to China and India which are 77% and 75% respectively. Both countries also share the same level of houshold water usage with only 15%. Industrial sector in the UAE consume highest water level over three quarter as compare as the household and agriculture and cultivation which are both equally used with 10%. In contrast, only the samll proportion of water is distributed for manufacturing in Chinese and Indian industrial with 10% and 8% sequentially.
The chart
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represent
the information of how the global
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water
is allocated
and the table illustrates the proportion of
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water
usage in
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agriculture
, domestic, and industry from three
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different
countries-including China, India, and the UAE.

In general
overview,
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majority of
the
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water
are occupied
by salt
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water
and
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only
5% is fresh
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water
. And
mainly
the
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water
was
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used
for
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agriculture
in China while the major of
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water
consumption is in the UAE.

According to the information, 75% of fresh
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water
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come
from ice and glaciers compare to ground
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water
which
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only
comprising for almost one-third of fresh
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water
and surface
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water
is the least part with
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only
2%.

It can be
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seen
that most of
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water
is
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used
in
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agriculture
according to China and India which are 77% and 75%
respectively
. Both countries
also
share the same level of
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houshold
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water
usage with
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only
15%. Industrial sector in the UAE consume
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highest
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water
level over
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three quarter
as compare as the household and
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agriculture
and cultivation which are both
equally
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used
with 10%.
In contrast
,
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only
the
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samll
proportion of
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water
is distributed
for manufacturing in Chinese and Indian industrial with 10% and 8%
sequentially
.
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IELTS academic The chart represent the information of how the global water is allocated and the table illustrates the proportion of water usage in agriculture, domestic, and industry from three different countries-including China, India, and the UAE.

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