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the chart illustrates travel of the people of UK

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The chart illustrates data regarding travelism to and from the England, and nearly the most famous nations for the UK citizens to visit abroad. Overall, it can be observed that residents of the UK had by far the maximum figure, while other tourists visit to the England was minimum over the period given, Furthermore, the highest number of English people of the UK visited mostly France. In terms of the overseas residents, 10 millions merely backpack to travel Britain in 1979, which little bit rose after 1984, and then the proportion increased slightly more and reached and roundabout 22 millions people traveled in 1999, whilst England's species pack their bags to see and explore other countries which was 11 millions to 20 millions in 1979 and 1984 consistently, that figure drastically rose and approximately 53 millions went abroad. Moreover, In 1999, tourists of the UK went mostly in Spain, proximately 12 millions, but in Turkey merely 2 millions saw that country. In addition Spain as well follow the same pattern as Spain. Neverthless, the UK and Greece was in about 3% and 4% millions in 1999
The chart illustrates data regarding
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travelism
to and from the England, and
nearly
the most
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famous
nations for the UK citizens to visit abroad.

Overall
, it can
be observed
that residents of the UK had by far the maximum figure, while other tourists visit to the England was minimum over the period
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given
,
Furthermore
, the highest number of English
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people
of the UK visited
mostly
France.

In terms of the overseas residents, 10
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millions
merely
backpack to travel Britain in 1979, which
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little bit
rose after 1984, and then the proportion increased
slightly
more and reached and roundabout 22
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millions
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people
traveled in 1999, whilst England's species pack their bags to
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see
and explore other countries which was 11
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millions
to 20
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millions
in 1979 and 1984
consistently
, that figure
drastically
rose and approximately 53
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millions
went abroad.

Moreover
, In 1999, tourists of the UK went
mostly
in Spain,
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proximately
12
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millions
,
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but
in Turkey
merely
2
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millions
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saw
that country. In
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addition
Spain
as well
follow the same pattern as Spain.
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Neverthless
, the UK and Greece was in about 3% and 4%
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millions
in 1999

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