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The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one University did after finishing Their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one University did after finishing Their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years AK7e
The diagram illustrates information about the works of anthropology graduates from a University after completing their degree course. The table display the five years of work payments of the anthropologists. Oveall, the chart shows that most of the students works on a full time job and least of the students work on part-time work+ postgrad study. the table also give information about anthropologists salaries. To begin, the half of the students work on a full time job(52%). Anthropology graduates of 15% work on part-time job. The 5% of gradutes works on part-time job and they also keep studying on postgrad. The students who study on postgrad and also works as a full time employe(8%). The unemployed portion is 12% and rest of the portion (8%) are unknown. From the second chart, anthropologists who works as a freelance consultant and their salaries was 5% moreover it increase into 40% in the last year. The payment of the government sector employees was 5% in the first year and in the last year it has a growth of 50%. The graduates who works on private companies who's salaries was 10% of the first year and it’s remain the lowest in the last year among other companies.
The diagram illustrates information about the works of anthropology graduates from a University after completing their degree course. The table
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sector employees was 5% in the
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IELTS academic The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one University did after finishing Their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years

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