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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. mG5K
The pie chart illustrates how different employment sectors are selected after the Brighton University graduates in the year 2019. Overall, the sports sector was selected by the least graduates in the year while the Service industry was the most significant selection among the graduates. The service industry sector accounted for 33% of graduates in Brighton University in 2019 and the manufacturing industry was included 16% of total graduates. There were also significant numbers in the Politics and Government and Educations sectors with 12. 1% and 14. 7% respectively. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at the transportation and warehousing sector at 7. 8% and science and technology sector had also seen considerably similarities which indicating 7. 3% of graduates’ contribution. Turning into the civil service sector is slightly below 5. 6%. there were 2. 8% graduates selected other sectors after their graduation. The percentages were quite similar for both charity services and sports sectors indicating 0. 3% and 0. 1%, respectively.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.

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