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the chart below shows the global sales of games from year 2000 to 2006

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the given bar graph illustrates the worldwide sales of different type of digital game between year 2000 and 2006. Overall, from the year 2000 handheld games sales were high and it continued growing by year 2006, while the sales of console games steadily decreasing. similarly online game grew when they get introduced. At the beginning, sales of handheld games from year 2000 which were about 12 which gradually increased by year 2006 (approximate sales price18$), however the console games' sales in year 2000 were nearly half of handheld games were started abruptly decreased. On the other hand, in year 2001 online game sale was around 1$ which was equal to sales of mobile games in year 2002 they both started increasing throughout the given years till 2006
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2000 and 2006.

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2000 handheld
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games
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were high and it continued growing by
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2006, while the
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of console
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steadily
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online game grew when they
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from
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2000 which were about 12 which
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2006 (approximate
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price
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in
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2000 were
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started
abruptly
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, in
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2001 online game
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was around
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which was equal to
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of mobile
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in
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2002 they both
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started
increasing throughout the
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years till 2006

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