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The chart below shows the electricity consumption in different sectors of Eastern Europe in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the electricity consumption in different sectors of Eastern Europe in 2007 and 2010. Nj6m
The provided circular chart depicts data on consumption of electricity in 8 different sectors in Eastern Europe in 2007 and 2010. It is vivid from the pie chart that there was no change in the portion of electricity consumption residential, commercial, transport and agricultural sectors between 2007 and 2010. In both these years, residential and commercial together accounted for slightly more than half of the electricity usage, with individual figure 28% and 23%. In contrast, a mere 1. 8% of electricity was consumed in agricultural and transport sector combined. Electricity consumption in other metals and mining saw an increase. In other metals, the proportion rose by 6% over the three years to reach 18. 3% in 2010, while in mining it was 9% in 2007 and it stood at 9. 4% in 2010. By contrast, electricity consumption in manufacturing and aluminium stood at around 12. 5% and 13. 5% respectively in 2007 and over the three years there was a fall of 4% and 2% respectively.
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sectors in Eastern Europe in 2007 and 2010. It is vivid from the pie chart that there was no
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in the portion of
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residential, commercial, transport and agricultural sectors between 2007 and 2010. In both these years, residential and commercial together accounted for
slightly
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electricity
usage, with individual figure 28% and 23%.
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electricity
was consumed
in agricultural and transport sector combined.
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consumption
in other metals and mining
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an increase. In other metals, the proportion rose by 6% over the three years to reach 18. 3% in 2010, while in mining it was 9% in 2007 and it stood at 9. 4% in 2010. By contrast,
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electricity
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in manufacturing and
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stood at around 12. 5% and 13. 5%
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in 2007 and over the three years there was a fall of 4% and 2%
respectively
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the electricity consumption in different sectors of Eastern Europe in 2007 and 2010.

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