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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. AY6e
The graph represents the variation in levels in the three main areas of crime in the centre of Newport city in the time period from 2003 to 2012. To start with, it was 3400 incidences of burglary in 2003 and 3750 in 2004. Fortunately, in the next 4 years it fell down dramatically and reached the absolute minimum in 2008 (1100 incidences), however, it then grew by 300 accidents and remained fairly constant by 2012. Car theft was a steady level of crime from 2003 to 2004 and got reduced in next 5 years from 2700 up to 2250. The number then increased to 2700 in 2012. Robbery reached its peak in 2005, which was 900 cases and decreased back to 500 in 2008. In the following two years, the number of incidences rose to 700 and continued to stay at this level in 2012. In conclusion, in the Newport city centre, the rate of burglary fell significantly, the level of robbery remained fairly constant, whereas car theft raised and had the biggest number of incidences in 2012.
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in the three main areas of crime in the
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of Newport city in the time period from 2003 to 2012.

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of burglary in 2003 and 3750 in 2004.
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and reached the absolute minimum in 2008 (1100
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,
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, it then grew by 300 accidents and remained
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constant by 2012.

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of crime from 2003 to 2004 and
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5 years from 2700 up to 2250. The number then increased to 2700 in 2012.

Robbery reached its peak in 2005, which was 900 cases and decreased back to 500 in 2008. In the following two years, the number of
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rose to 700 and continued to stay at this
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in 2012.

In conclusion
, in the Newport city
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centre
, the rate of burglary fell
significantly
, the
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of robbery remained
fairly
constant, whereas car theft raised and had the biggest number of
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in 2012.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012.

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