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The chart below shows percentages of working adults spent on different activities in 1958 and 2008 year.

The chart below shows percentages of working adults spent on different activities in 1958 and 2008 year. pLBew
The provide pie charts illustrate the rate of time working invest by adults on various activities. The information is given for 1958 and 2008 years. Units are measured in percentages. Overall, it can be seen that the maximum percentages of the time spent on working, while the least time consumed by travel to work. Looking at the graph in detail, in 1958, the adults who had spent the highest time working, was a third, but it went up to augment by 9 percent in 2008. However, The activity of going out with friends and family had 19 percent by 1958, but after 50 years, It was plunged from 19 percent to 6 percent, respectively. On the other hand, The adults were invested minimal time on travel to work that was ranged between 2 to 8 percent throughout the period. Analyzing other categories, For other interests or playing sports and relaxing at home were seems inclined by 2 percent from 6 percent and 5 percent from 8 percent the years between 1958 and 2008. In contrast, the activities of sleeping, the adults were consumed 32 percent in 1958, but it was declined by 7 percent and reached 25 percent in the last years.
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pie charts illustrate the rate of
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time
working invest by
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adults
on various activities. The information is
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for 1958 and 2008 years. Units
are measured
in percentages.

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, it can be
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seen
that the maximum percentages of the
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time
spent on working, while the least
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time
consumed by travel to work.

Looking at the graph in detail, in 1958, the
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adults
who had spent the highest
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time
working, was a third,
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but
it went up to augment by 9
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percent
in 2008.
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by 1958,
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after 50 years, It
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throughout the period.

Analyzing other categories, For other interests or playing sports and relaxing at home were seems inclined by 2
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from 6
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and 5
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from 8
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percent
the years between 1958 and 2008.
In contrast
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were consumed
32
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in 1958,
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and reached 25
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