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The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. lAPw
The bar chart depicts the percentage of free time spent by the kids from both genders in a certain area for specific interests in a certain period. Overall, the diagram shows that in Australia, both genders between five to fourteen years old are interested in watching TV and videos which also reached a peak of 100%. The study represents and focused on five different activities that young people are interested in doing during the day which involve Skateboarding/rollerblading, bike riding, watching TV/videos, electronic/ computer games, and art and craft. Nevertheless, the boys have a highest percentage than the girls in all the activities with a difference of 10% except for the art and craft group as the girls have a higher interest with a difference of 15% and the other group which is watching TV/videos as both genders have similar percent of interest which is also the peak to reach 100%. Moreover, girls got the lowest percentage in skateboarding and rollerblading activity that lead them to reach 30%, whereas, the boys have less interest in art and craft that reached 40%. Furthermore, electronic and computer games show the second highest percentage for the males that reached 80%. The third activity goes for bike riding as the boys reached 70%. Moreover, the females got similar interest in bike riding and electronic/computer games as they got similar percentage in both activities that reached 60%.
The bar chart depicts the
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percentage
of free time spent by the kids from both genders in a certain area for specific
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interests
in a certain period.
Overall
, the diagram
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shows
that in Australia, both genders
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between five to fourteen
years
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old
are interested
in watching TV and videos which
also
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reached
a peak of 100%.

The study represents and focused on five
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different
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activities
that young
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people
are interested
in doing during the day which involve Skateboarding/rollerblading, bike riding, watching TV/videos, electronic/ computer games, and art and craft.
Nevertheless
, the boys have
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a
highest
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percentage
than the girls in all the
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activities
with a difference of 10%
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except for
the art and craft group as the girls have a higher
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interest
with a difference of 15% and the other group which is watching TV/videos as both genders have similar percent of
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interest
which is
also
the peak to reach 100%.
Moreover
, girls
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got
the lowest
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percentage
in skateboarding and rollerblading
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activity
that lead them to reach 30%, whereas, the boys have less
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interest
in art and craft that
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reached
40%.

Furthermore
, electronic and computer games
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show
the second highest
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percentage
for the males that
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reached
80%. The third
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activity
goes for bike riding as the boys
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reached
70%.
Moreover
, the females
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got
similar
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interest
in bike riding and electronic/computer games as they
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got
similar
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percentage
in both
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activities
that
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reached
60%.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
232 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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