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The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. MX7o
The two pie charts compare the percentages of online sales across different retail sectors in Canada in the two different years, 2005 and 2010. Overall, the online sale of electronic item and home furnishing dropped, however, the craze for food and video games increased during the five years. To begin with, in 2005, the majority of online sales was accounted for electronics and appliance sector with 35%, however, this percentage had dropped to 30% by 2010. During the same five year period, the number of people deciding to buy food and beverages online increased and the transactions went from just 22% to 32%, making it the retail sector with the largest proportion of the online market. In 2005, the home furnishing industry boasted n impressive 25% of the total online sales in Canada. However, by 2010, the figure had fallen considerably to 15%. Interestingly, online sales of video games eventually overtook sales of home furnishing, although video games still represented only 23% of the market.
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of electronic item and home furnishing dropped,
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increased and the

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22% to 32%, making it the retail sector with the largest proportion of the

online market.

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23% of the market.
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