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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries

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The rendered table illustrates the population changes and their proportions of age group 65 and above in Canada, Germany, UK in the years 1988, 2000, 2030Overall, it is conspicuous from the chart that Germany has highest proportion of population whereas the UK has the least percentage of population in all the years. Explicitly, in 1988, German's population was around one fifth of the total and there is a gradual rise in the proportion which is nearly a quarter in 2000, almost one third in 2030. Moreover, in Canada the percentage of population is fluctuating. The percentage soared up from 16. 32% to 26. 35% from 1988 to 2030. Eventually, The UK, s population is almost similar in the first two years which is around 14%. However, there is a gradual increase in 2030 which is almost 21%.
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and their proportions of age group 65 and above in Canada, Germany, UK in the years 1988, 2000, 2030Overall, it is conspicuous from the chart that Germany has
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whereas the UK has the least percentage of
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in all the years.
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, in 1988, German's
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was around one fifth of the total and there is a gradual rise in the proportion which is
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a quarter in 2000, almost one third in 2030.
Moreover
, in Canada the percentage of
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is fluctuating. The percentage soared up from 16. 32% to 26. 35% from 1988 to 2030.
Eventually
, The UK, s
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is almost similar in the
first
two years which is around 14%.
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, there is a gradual increase in 2030 which is almost 21%.
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