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the chart below show the percentage of boys and girls in four different favorite activities of teenager in Canada

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The bar chart presents information on the boys and girls rates in four types of leisure activity among teenagers in Canada. Overall, the percentage of boys is higher than girls in each activity. Boys experienced a rapid increase at the end of the activity, while girls experienced a drastic decline. Although boys experienced an increase in the percentage but in the midst of favorite activities decreased. Meanwhile, the percentage of girls at the beginning of the activity increased in the three activities which then decreased in the last leisure activity. The percentage of boys in sporting activities is around 26%. Then there was a decrease of approximately 9% in the leisure activity of computer gamers. However, the percentage increased again in leisure music activities to approximately 20%, the percentage is the same as the percentage for girls. In the last leisure activity, namely shopping, the percentage of boys experienced a drastic increase of approximately 15%. Shopping is also a leisure activity that is mostly followed by boys. The percentage of leisure activity sport has a rate of 11% and for computer games it has increased to approximately 15%. Then in the next leisure activity, namely music, it still continues to increase by approximately 5%. This music among girls has the highest rate. For leisure activity shopping experienced a drastic decline to reach approximately 14% of music.
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increased again in
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sport has a rate of 11% and for computer games it has increased to
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