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The chart above compares telephone calls in the UK in three categories in terms of the total number of minutes (in billions) that were made from 1995-2002.

The chart above compares telephone calls in the UK in three categories in terms of the total number of minutes (in billions) that were made from 1995-2002. eEODO
The chart above compares telephone calls in the UK in three categories in terms of the total number of minutes (in billions) that were made from 1995-2002. After 7 years, the growth rate of each category increased but the positions were unchanged. The first place is local calls, followed by national and international calls, and mobile calls. As can be seen in the chart, in 1995, local calls dominated the first place with the total number of minutes made was over 70 billion; standing in sharp contrast with cell phone calls seeing the smallest figures (only nearly 5 billion). Whereas, consumption of domestic calls and overseas calls was nearly 40 billion. Additionally, regional calls had been suffered ups and downs during 7 years but still ranked first place in 2002 with the same figures in 1995. While national and international calls experienced a roughly 30 billion increase in making calls, the figures for smartphone calls went up dramatically with 40 billion change in using, a ninefold of that in 1995.
The chart above compares telephone
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calls
in the UK in three categories in terms of the total number of minutes (in
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billions)
that
were made
from 1995-2002.

After 7 years, the growth rate of each category increased
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but
the positions
were unchanged
. The
first
place is local
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calls
, followed by national and international
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calls
, and mobile calls.

As can be
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seen
in the chart, in 1995, local
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calls
dominated the
first
place with the total number of minutes made was over 70
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billion
; standing in sharp contrast with cell phone
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calls
seeing the smallest figures (
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only
nearly
5
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billion)
. Whereas, consumption of domestic
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calls
and overseas
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calls
was
nearly
40 billion.

Additionally
, regional
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calls
had
been suffered
ups and downs during 7 years
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but
still
ranked
first
place in 2002 with the same figures in 1995. While national and international
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calls
experienced a roughly 30
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billion
increase in making
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calls
, the figures for smartphone
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calls
went up
dramatically
with 40
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billion
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change
in using,
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a ninefold of
that in 1995.
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IELTS academic The chart above compares telephone calls in the UK in three categories in terms of the total number of minutes (in billions) that were made from 1995-2002.

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