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The below picture shows the stages of renewing the glass bottles.

The below picture shows the stages of renewing the glass bottles. gqdOd
The diagram depicts the Step-by-step procces to recycling the glass bottles Overall, it is vividly shown that there are seven consecutive steps, which start with gathering the wasted glass bottles, processing them, and ending with delivery of new product. At first stage, wasted glasses assembled in a collection center in order to transport them by truck for the next step that is cleaning by exposing under the high temperature to eliminate the dust and dirt up before being classified into three different colour namely, green, clear and brown. The consecuitve step is sending the bottles to the glass factory for further process which is cutting them into smaller pieces. The process continue with burning thoes pieces in the specific furnace at a high temperature of 600c-800c to become molted glass. After this stage is completed, he recycled molten glass and new liquid glass mix together and produce new products of renewed new bottle. Finally the new bottle filled with drink, and delivered to the supermarket that would be ready for sales.
The diagram depicts the Step-by-step
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procces
to recycling the
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glass
bottles

Overall
, it is
vividly
shown that there are seven consecutive steps, which
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start
with gathering the wasted
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glass
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bottles
, processing them, and ending with delivery of
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new
product.

At
first
stage, wasted glasses assembled in a collection center in order to transport them by truck for the
next
step
that is
cleaning by exposing under the high temperature to eliminate the dust and dirt up
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before
being classified
into three
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different
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colour
namely
, green,
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clear
and brown.

The
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consecuitve
step is sending the
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bottles
to the
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glass
factory for
further
process which is cutting them into smaller pieces. The process continue with burning
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thoes
pieces in the specific furnace at a high temperature of 600c-800c to become molted
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glass
. After this stage
is completed
, he recycled molten
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glass
and
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new
liquid
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glass
mix together and produce
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new
products of renewed
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new
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bottle
.
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Finally
the
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new
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bottle
filled with drink, and delivered to the supermarket that would be ready for sales.

IELTS academic The below picture shows the stages of renewing the glass bottles.

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171 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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