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The below charts show the expenditure of students in one University. Summerise, report and make comparison where relevant.

The below charts show the expenditure of students in one University. Summerise, report and make comparison where relevant. MmbwL

The chart indicate the percentage of expenses by ordinary pupils at a college in 2000 and 2010. Overall, the proportion of food and drink(home) section took up the highest which was 29% and that rate as same in 2 years. Morover, the percentage of both holidays and sports and cultural sections remained stable that are 5%, 7% respectively. On the other hand, there are many remarkable changes in the rest of these sections which will be mentioned below. As can be drawn from the chart, there was a significant increased of percentage in Utilities(electricity/water) section which strated rate of 21% and went up 6% to 27% in 2010. In addition, the proportion of expenditure of eating out was boost double that from the lowest rate 4% to 8%. Futhermore, the rate of transport was slighty rose up just 1% from 8% at the beginning to 9%. In contrast, the percent of clothing was a notable declined which it went down by 3 times from 16% to 5% in the later year.

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