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The bar graph shows information on employement rates in 1995 and 2005 in china

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The given bar represents data about workforce rates according to gender category in china between 1995 and 2005 years. Looking from an Overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the highest percentage of males were worked in Iceland While the lowest ratio of females were employed in Australia and Newzealand. Moreover, the employement rates of males were higher than females throught the given period. In the male category, only 70% males were worked in 1995 and that was risen in next year with 80% in Iceland. the ratio of males occupation were similar in Newzealand and USA in both years with 50% and 70% respectively. In addition, the workforce rate in Swizerland were higher than Australia with 10% in given periods. In the female category, Only 25% females were job in 1995 and this was risen by 10% in next year. In Swizerland just 5% females were higher in first year than the second year. Besides that USA and UK works percentile near about 60 and 70 in 1995 and 2005 reapectively
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bar represents data about workforce rates according to gender category in
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china
between 1995 and 2005 years. Looking from an
Overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that the highest percentage of
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males
were worked
in Iceland While the lowest ratio of
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females
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were
employed in Australia and
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Newzealand
.
Moreover
, the
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employement
rates of
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males
were higher than
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females
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throught
the
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given
period. In the male category,
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only
70%
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were worked
in 1995 and that
was risen
in
next
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with 80% in Iceland.
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the
ratio of
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occupation were similar in
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Newzealand
and USA in both years with 50% and 70%
respectively
.
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, the workforce rate in
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Swizerland
were higher than Australia with 10% in
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given
periods. In the
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female
category,
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Only
25%
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females
were job in 1995 and this
was risen
by 10% in
next
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year
.
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In
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Swizerland
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5%
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than the second
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.
Besides
that USA and UK works percentile near about 60 and 70 in 1995 and 2005
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reapectively

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