Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statistics for nine countries in 1981 and 1994. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.

The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statistics for nine countries in 1981 and 1994. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. pVwy
The two bar charts depicts the information of nine different country's marriage and divorce rates in the year 1981 and 1994. Overall, the highest percentage of people who get married as well as get divorced in both year was the USA whereas, Italy had a significant decrease in the divorce rates as compared to all other countries. Firstly, in 1981, more than 10 thousand couples were married in USA and least number of couple was in Denmark. Meanwhile, all the other countries had an equal rate in all over the year. In 1994, the maximum rate of married people were in the USA whereas, minimum was in France. Moreover, others had an upward as well as downward trend in its rates. On the other hand, divorce statistics has a tremendous fluctuations, despite the USA had high married rate, they also has first position in divorce rates in both the year, Germany had a stable rate whereas Italy has the lowest. In 1994. UK and Finland has an increased divorce rates
The two bar charts depicts the information of nine
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
country's marriage and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
divorce
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
1981 and 1994.
Overall
, the highest percentage of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
married
as well
as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
divorced in both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
was the USA whereas, Italy had a significant decrease in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
divorce
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
as compared to all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
countries.
Firstly
, in 1981, more than 10 thousand couples
were married
A determiner is probably missing here: "in the USA".
in USA
and least number of couple was in Denmark. Meanwhile, all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
countries had an equal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
in all over the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
. In 1994, the maximum
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
of married
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
were in the USA whereas, minimum was in France.
Moreover
, others had an upward
as well
as downward trend in its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
. On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
divorce
statistics has a tremendous
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "fluctuation"?
fluctuations
, despite the USA had high married
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
, they
also
The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "have", "haven"
has
first
position in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
divorce
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
in both the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
, Germany had a stable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
whereas Italy has the lowest. In 1994. UK and Finland has an increased
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
divorce
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
rates
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statistics for nine countries in 1981 and 1994. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
169 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statistics for nine countries in 1981 and 1994. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.