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The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have part-time jobs in the countries that make up the United Kingdom, both in 1980 and in 2010.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have part-time jobs in the countries that make up the United Kingdom, both in 1980 and in 2010. 6xlGx
The Bar Chart Illustrates Percentage OF Part time Workers In Four Countries Of Uk Englsnd, Northern Ireland, Scotland And wales From 1980 To 2010. More Overall Whales Had The Highest Percentage Throughtout the Period. Whereas In Begining OF the Period scotland percentage was More Than Northern Ireland While In The En Of the Period Scotland Outraced Northern Ireland. In 1980 Wales Percentages Was Around 32% But In 2010 it Showed Slight Growth And Uplift To Almost 35%. Second Most Significant Counrty After Wasles Was England In Begining 25% OF People Worked as Part Time Although This figure Went Up more Than 30% Scotland had The Smallest Percentage OF pArt Time Workers merely More Than 10%. However This Figure Rose To almost 20% in 2010. Nortern Ireland was only Country Which Exprienced Downward Trend Among All Countries. In 1980 It had nearly 15% OF Part Time Worker. This Decreased by Couple Of PErcentage
The Bar Chart Illustrates
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have part-time jobs in the countries that make up the United Kingdom, both in 1980 and in 2010.

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