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The bar chart shows how many people aged 25-34 either rent or have bought a house in the UK.

The bar chart shows how many people aged 25-34 either rent or have bought a house in the UK. VE6NJ
The bar chart shows how many people aged 25-34 either rent or have bought a house in the UK. Furthermore, it illustrates this change over an eleven-year period. The number of home owners within this age range has decreased substantially since 2004. In 2004, nearly 60% owned their own home, whereas in 2014 this dropped to under 40%. There was a gradual decrease in home ownership over the eleven-year period which was more significant from 200 to 2014. Only in 2011 and 2012 did the number remain stable at just over 40%. The rental market, however, has increased dramatically over the same eleven-year period. From 2004 to 2014, the number of people renting has risen by nearly 30%. Again, this has been a gradual increase in most year, rising by just a few percent each year. In 2014, the rental market reached a peak at just under 50%.
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an eleven-year period.

The number of
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since 2004. In 2004,
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home, whereas in 2014 this dropped to under 40%. There was a gradual decrease in home ownership
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Only
in 2011 and 2012 did the number remain stable at
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The rental market,
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the same eleven-year period. From 2004 to 2014, the number of
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renting has risen by
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a few percent each year. In 2014, the rental market reached a peak at
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under 50%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows how many people aged 25-34 either rent or have bought a house in the UK.

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148 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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