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The bar chart illustrates the Emigration of Britishers to various destinations like Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA, France in the four consecutive years from 2004 to 2007.

The bar chart illustrates the Emigration of Britishers to various destinations like Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA, France in the four consecutive years from 2004 to 2007. yxk2r
In the year 2004, the majority of the population around 40, 000 Britishers had preferred to migrate to Australia while 35000 of the people to Spain and the rest of the people preferred to go to New Zealand, the USA, and France. However, in the next year 2005, there is not much change in interests of people as 39000 of Britain population shifted to Australia which is less compared to the year 2004, 32000 to Spain and France, and the remaining people to New Zealand, the USA. Similarly, in the year 2006, a maximum of 52000 of the citizens preferred Australia, having Spain in the second position with 32, 000 followed by France, the USA, New Zealand with 25000, 22000 and 21000 respectively. Finally, in the year 2007 also follows a similar trend by having a small change in the last three positions where an equal number of people are interested towards New Zealand and the USA, while the least of the population to France. Overall, it is observed that despite the years, most of the population of Britain are fascinated to migrate to Australia although interests in Spain remains the same.
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2004, the majority of the
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around 40, 000 Britishers had preferred to migrate to Australia while 35000 of the
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people
to Spain and the rest of the
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preferred to go to
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, in the
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2005, there is not much
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in interests of
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as 39000 of Britain
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shifted to Australia which is less compared to the
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2004, 32000 to Spain and France, and the remaining
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to
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New
Zealand, the USA.

Similarly
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2006, a maximum of 52000 of the citizens preferred Australia, having Spain in the second position with 32, 000 followed by France, the USA,
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New
Zealand with 25000, 22000 and 21000
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.

Finally
, in the
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2007
also
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in the last three positions where an equal number of
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are interested
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to France.

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is observed
that despite the years, most of the
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of Britain
are fascinated
to migrate to Australia although interests in Spain remains the same.
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