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The bar chart illustrates how many people were using the Internet in three different countries including Greece, Denmark, Canada, and the average figure for the world from 1998 to 2013.

The bar chart illustrates how many people were using the Internet in three different countries including Greece, Denmark, Canada, and the average figure for the world from 1998 to 2013. lR6Yo
The bar chart illustrates how many people were using the Internet in three different countries including Greece, Denmark, Canada, and the average figure for the world from 1998 to 2013. Overall, the worldwide statistic experienced a gradual increase throughout the research period. Moreover, the upward trend for the world average was repeated for all of the researched countries, with the highest figures in 2013, while the opposite was true for 1998. As can be seen from the graph, the figure for the average number of internet users from all over the world witnessed an significant increase from around 3% to 35% during the research period. In addition, Canada had the highest figure in 1998, at just below at 30%, before witnessing a remarkable rise to around 79% in 2003. In the remaining period, this figure continued to gradually increase to around 95% at the end of the period. Regarding the other countries, Denmark and Greece started off at around 22% and 2% respectively in 1998. The figures for Denmark also saw a similar pattern to that of Canada’s, concluding at around 89% in 2013. In comparison, there was a more consistent increase in Greece’s figure, ending at just above at 60%.
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countries including Greece, Denmark, Canada, and the average
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for the world from 1998 to 2013.

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in 2013, while the opposite was true for 1998.

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in 1998, at
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a similar pattern to that of Canada’s, concluding at
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