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The bar chart illustrates How many calories were consumed in different seven countries in a 25 year period begining from 1975.

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The bar chart illustrates How many calories were consumed in different seven countries in a 25 year period begining from 1975. Units are measured in calories. It can be clearly seen that the consumption levels rose significantly in all countries. Ađitonally, Brazil got the highest calorie consumption in 1975 whereas Bangladesh reached the lowest point in same year. Specially, Bangladesh continued to hit the fewest calorie consumption in 2000, while China overtook Brazil to become the country where most calories were consumed. In 1975, Brazil's calorie consumption reached the peak with 2500. Apart from this people in most nations consumed around 2000 calories, calorie consumption was approaching the 3000 mark in most countries by the year 2000. In 2000, China got over Brazil to intake highest calories with 3000 and increased by 1000 calories together with Indonesia compared with 1975. Futhermore, the increased calories intake of Nigeria which was about 800 was higher than in Brazil with 500 calories On the top of that, both Pakistan and India reached approximately 2500 calories in this year
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