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The bar chart illustrates four various transport vehicles consumed by tourists who visited New Zealand among British, German, Japanese, Korean, and Australian in 2004.

The bar chart illustrates four various transport vehicles consumed by tourists who visited New Zealand among British, German, Japanese, Korean, and Australian in 2004. YwVMV
The bar chart illustrates four various transport vehicles consumed by tourists who visited New Zealand among British, German, Japanese, Korean, and Australian in 2004. Overall, it is clear that the most popular transport vehicles in five countries were recorded in cars. However, only have Japanese chose to travel by air over other means of transport. As shown in the bar chart, there were 60 percent transport vehicles used by tourists from Britain to travel, 50 percent witnessed from Korea, and approximately 52 percent of tourists belonged to German used cars to visit various places in New Zealand. There was less more than other countries consumed by tourists from Australia, with about 45 percent accordingly. Obviously, the Japanese were not in favour of car travel, and only about 25 percent of them used cars. Japanese tourists were enthusiastic about air travel, measuring at about 52 percent. Other countries such as Britain and Germany used air transport to visit New Zealand were relatively growth, with around 35 percent and 25 percent respectively. Moreover, air travel was preferred by 30 percent of Korean tourists, and there was about 10 percent of tourists from Australia used air transport to visit. This figure was the lowest of total air transport consumed by visitors. 40 percent of Korean tourists used coaches, which is nearly double the percentage of British tourists using coaches. Especially, Japanese preferred coaches next to air travel, accounting for 52 percent of them went for it. Australian used coaches the least and only an insignificantly minority, with about 8 percent accordingly. Furthermore, the highest proportion of ferry used by tourists was recorded in Germany, accounting for 47 percent, and nearly 35 percent of Britain tourists consumed it for travel. The next three categories had smaller figures, starting with 15 percent in Australia and progressing through 10 percent in Japanese to 8 percent in Korea used the ferries respectively. In conclusion, most Japanese and a significant majority of Australians and Koreans preferred to travel by air, whereas the British and Germans used cars and ferries more.
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who visited New Zealand among British, German, Japanese, Korean, and Australian in 2004.

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, it is
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that the most popular
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vehicles in five countries
were recorded
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have Japanese chose to
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over other means of transport.

As shown in the bar chart, there were 60
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transport
vehicles
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tourists
from Britain to
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, 50
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witnessed from Korea, and approximately 52
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of
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belonged to German
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used
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to visit various places in New Zealand. There was
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from Australia, with about 45
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accordingly
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Japanese
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were enthusiastic about
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air
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, measuring at about 52
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. Other countries such as Britain and Germany
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to visit New Zealand were
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growth, with around 35
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and 25
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respectively
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was preferred
by 30
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of Korean
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from Australia
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to visit. This figure was the lowest of total
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40
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, accounting for 52
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of them went for it. Australian
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Furthermore
, the highest proportion of ferry
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in Australia and progressing through 10
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the ferries
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, most Japanese and a significant majority of Australians and Koreans preferred to
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