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The bar chart displays the frequency with which people in the USA ate in fast-food outlets between 2003 and 2013.

The bar chart displays the frequency with which people in the USA ate in fast-food outlets between 2003 and 2013. MrKe9
The bar chart displays the frequency with which people in the USA ate in fast-food outlets between 2003 and 2013. Overall, in all three years, the two largest groups were those eating in fast-food restaurants once a week and those eating there once or twice a month. Those eating there daily and those never eating there, in comparison, accounted for the smallest proportions. The majority of people ate in fast-food outlets weekly in both 2003 and 2006, at about 31% and 33% respectively. However, the percentage dropped to 27 in 2013. The proportion of those in the “once or twice a month” category first fell from 30% to 25% between 2003 and 2006. It then went up significantly to 33% in 2013, making these people the largest group that year. The proportion of those eating in fast-food restaurants several times a week varied between 15% and 20%, while the proportion eating there a few times a year showed an increase from 13% to 15% over the period. By contrast, in none of the three years were more than 5% of people ever in either of the “every day” or “never” categories.
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-food outlets between 2003 and 2013.

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, in all three years, the two largest groups were those
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eating
in
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-food restaurants once a week and those
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there once or twice a month. Those
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there daily and those never
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there,
in comparison
, accounted for the smallest proportions.

The majority of
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ate in
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-food outlets weekly in both 2003 and 2006, at about 31% and 33%
respectively
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, the percentage dropped to 27 in 2013. The proportion of those in the “once or twice a month” category
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the largest group that year.

The proportion of those
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in
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fast
-food restaurants several times a week varied between 15% and 20%, while the proportion
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there a few times a year
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an increase from 13% to 15% over the period. By contrast, in none of the three years were more than 5% of
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ever in either of the “every day” or “never” categories.

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