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The bar chart depicts the percentage of men, women and children who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart depicts the percentage of men, women and children who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in UK from 2001 to 2008. dKo2
The bar chart depicts the percentage of men, women and children who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in UK from 2001 to 2008. As shown in the chart there is a stability in the percentage of children from 2001 to 2003. Although, the numbers show that this is the same case with the ratio of men. But, if we take a look towards the percentage of women, it is constantly rising till year 2006 and shows a decline towards the years 2007 and 2008. In years 2004 to 2206 both men and children have illustrated an incline in the numbers. Meanwhile, the percentage of children increased again in 2007 whereas the percentage remain same for men in 2007. Finally, in year 2008 the ratio for both men and children has also shown a decrease same as of the women's
The bar chart depicts the
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, women and
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children
who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in UK from 2001 to 2008.
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As
shown in the chart there is a stability in the
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of
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children
from 2001 to 2003.
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, the numbers
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that this is the same case with the ratio of
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men
.
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, if we take a look towards the
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percentage
of women, it is
constantly
rising till
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year
2006 and
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shows
a decline towards the years 2007 and 2008. In years 2004 to 2206 both
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men
and
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children
have illustrated an incline in the numbers. Meanwhile, the
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percentage
of
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children
increased again in 2007 whereas the
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percentage
remain same for
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men
in 2007.
Finally
, in
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year
2008 the ratio for both
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men
and
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children
has
also
shown a decrease same as of the women's

IELTS academic The bar chart depicts the percentage of men, women and children who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in UK from 2001 to 2008.

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