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The bar chart compares the proportion of various age group of Australian men and women who engaged in physical workout regularly in 2010.

The bar chart compares the proportion of various age group of Australian men and women who engaged in physical workout regularly in 2010. Overall, it can be seen that the majority of males, particularly teenagers do more exercise, whereas the number of females, mainly those who aged 45 to 54 engaged in physical activities more compared to teenage females. The facts of the bar chart data reveal that mainly males who aged 15 to 24 were committed to more physical activities that account for 52. 8%, but, till 35 to 44, symmetry of this activism declined significantly (39. 5%). However, beginning from males aged 45 to 54, till senior males aged 65 and over, the percentage of this activism went up to 46. 7%. On the opposite, it is obvious from the females' proportion that the most active females were 45 to 54 which corresponds 53. 3%. Moreover, young women were less active compared to men aged 15 to 24. Likewise, it can be noted that the number of male and female who are 65 years old and over was nearly the same with 46. 7% and 47. 1% respectively.
The bar chart compares the proportion of various age group of Australian
men
and women
who
engaged in physical workout
regularly
in 2010.
Overall
, it can be
seen
that the majority of
males
,
particularly
teenagers
do more exercise, whereas the number of females,
mainly
those
who
aged
45 to 54 engaged in physical activities more compared to teenage females.

The facts of the bar chart data reveal that
mainly
males
who
aged
15 to 24
were committed
to more physical activities that account for 52. 8%,
but
, till 35 to 44, symmetry of this activism declined
significantly
(39. 5%).
However
, beginning from
males
aged
45 to 54, till senior
males
aged
65 and over, the percentage of this activism went up to 46. 7%.

On the opposite, it is obvious from the females' proportion that the most active females were 45 to 54 which corresponds 53. 3%.
Moreover
, young women were less active compared to
men
aged
15 to 24.
Likewise
, it can
be noted
that the number of male and female
who
are 65 years
old
and over was
nearly
the same with 46. 7% and 47. 1%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The bar chart compares the proportion of various age group of Australian men and women who engaged in physical workout regularly in 2010.

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