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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The distribution of Australian citizens in different age groups who were engaged in regular physical activity in 2010 is depicted in the given bar diagram. Overall, the proportion of Australian women who did regular exercise was higher than their male counterparts, except in case of the youngest age group. It is clear from the chart that more than half of the Australian women between 35 and 64 were involved in some kind of physical activity, and this was the highest in the 45 to 54 age group (53. 3%). Men in these three age groups (35 to 44, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64) were less-interested in performing physical activities, but the rate of those who were involved is seen increased in the older age groups (from 39. 5 to 45. 1%). However, this proportion is seen almost leveled in case of those who were over 65 (almost 47%). The proportional disparity between the two genders was approximately 6. 5% in the age group 25 to 34. The only exception was reported in case of the youngest age group (15 to 24), in which the male proportion (52. 8) stood higher than the females’ (47. 7).
The distribution of Australian citizens in
different
age
groups
who
were engaged
in regular physical activity in 2010
is depicted
in the
given
bar diagram.

Overall
, the proportion of Australian women
who
did regular exercise was higher than their male counterparts, except in case of the youngest
age
group.

It is
clear
from the chart that more than half of the Australian women between 35 and 64
were involved
in
some
kind of physical activity, and this was the highest in the 45 to 54
age
group
(53. 3%).
Men
in these three
age
groups
(35 to 44, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64) were less-interested in performing physical activities,
but
the rate of those
who
were involved
is
seen
increased in the older
age
groups
(from 39. 5 to 45. 1%).
However
, this proportion is
seen
almost leveled in case of those
who
were over 65 (almost 47%). The proportional disparity between the two genders was approximately 6. 5% in the
age
group
25 to 34.

The
only
exception
was reported
in case of the youngest
age
group
(15 to 24), in which the male proportion (52. 8) stood higher than the females’ (47. 7).
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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