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The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the amount of Southland’s main exports

The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the amount of Southland’s main exports L97Dp
The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the amount of Southland’s main exports, over a course 25 years, starting from 2000. Overall, a closer look at the graph highlights the fact that the figure for Meat products is expected to decrease, the opposite is true for those of International tourism and Dairy products throughout the period shown. Looking at the bar chart in detail, the amount of Meat products began over 6 billions in 2000 and then declined around 5, 7 billions in 2015 before being predicted to hit a lowest to exactly 5 billion while the figure for international tourism is expected to rise from over 8 billions in 2000 to 10 billions in 2025. Sarting at 7 billions in the first year of the period, the figure for dairy products experienced a significant growth to nearly 10 millions. But later, it will fall slowly to 9, 5 billions at the end of the period.
The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the
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in the amount of Southland’s main exports, over a course 25 years, starting from 2000.

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is
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to decrease, the opposite is true for those of International tourism and Dairy
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throughout the period shown.

Looking at the bar chart in detail, the amount of Meat
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began over 6
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in 2000 and then declined around 5, 7
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in 2015
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before
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while the figure for international tourism is
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to rise from over 8
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in 2000 to 10
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IELTS academic The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the amount of Southland’s main exports

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