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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The showing bar chart display the top ten countries in production and consumption of electricity in only one year – 2014. First of all, it is obvious that China is undoubled leader in both directions with almost 5. 500 billion kWh each one. Close to the leader is United States which produce and consume nearly 4. 000 billion kWh. Along with them is Russia whose date are almost equal in both directions. Definitely, three of the most powerful and big countries will occupy the leading positions. In contrast to leading countries, the next ones are with lower production and consuming of electricity – all above 1. 000 billion kWh. Following the chart, we can see that Japan, India, Canada and France are next big producers of electricity (between 936 and 561 kWh). Also, their production is decrease (936 for Japan and 462 for France). Last but not at least, the remain three countries – Brazil, German and Republic of Korea are at the bottom of charging with production and consummation between 530 and 449 billion. It should be noted that all countries produce more than they actually consume, only exception in German that consume more that produce.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

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