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The bar chart below shows the proportion of elderly population in Germany,Canada,and the uk in 1980,2000and 2030.

The bar chart below shows the proportion of elderly population in Germany, Canada, and the uk in 1980, 2000and 2030. KWRQR
The report reveals the information regarding the changes that took place in proportion of elder citizens in three different countries in years 1980 and 2000, and predicated year 2030. Overall, the percentage of people aged 65 and over increased and is anticipated to rise in all countries. In 1980, the proportion of population between 65 and over in Germany, which was the highest, was 15% of total, closely followed by Canada which accounted for nearly 14%. However, the UK amounted for the least proportion with 10% of total in the same year. The figure for all countries rose slightly by 2000 and reached 20% of total in Germany and 15% of total for rest of nation. According to predictions, the percentage of people having age 65 or over is estimated to incline. In details, the statistics in Germany would climb dramatically and hit its peak with 25% of total. Similar to it, the data for Canada nd the UK is anticipated to incline slightly by 2050.
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aged 65 and over increased and
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,
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followed by Canada which accounted for
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, the UK amounted for the least proportion with 10% of
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in the same year. The figure for all countries rose
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by 2000 and reached 20% of
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in Germany and 15% of
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for rest of nation.

According to predictions, the percentage of
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having age 65 or over
is estimated
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, the statistics in Germany would climb
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by 2050.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the proportion of elderly population in Germany, Canada, and the uk in 1980, 2000and 2030.

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