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The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. 8XD5
The bar chart gives information on the proportion of students who passed their exams at high school, by subject and gender, from 2010 to 2011. It is clear that the percentage of girls who passed exams is higher in most subjects throughout the given period. It is also worth pointing out that girls achieve the highest pass rate in computer science, and Mathematics for boys. Looking at the graph in more detail, more than half of the girls passed their computer science exam recording 56. 3% pass rate. This figure was the highest figure among all the subjects, followed by Mathematics at 49. 2%. There was a huge difference by approximately 14. 2% between the figure for boys and girls. As mentioned, the pass rate for mathematics exams was the second highest figure for girls marking about 49. 2%, while the figure for boys recorded about 48. 4%. This figure was the highest pass rate for boys. Nearly half of the candidates despite the gender passed Foregin languages exam. About 47. 4% of female candidates passed the exam, while about 46. 8% of the candidates passed the exam. As far as the pass rate for the Geography exam was concerning for both genders. Only about a fifth of the female candidates passed the exam, while just below one-third of the male candidates passed this exam. This figure for girls was the lowest figure between all the other subjects. As for the Chemistry exam, boys recorded about 14. 1% of pass rate which was the lowest figure, whereas around 10% of girls passed the exam. The figure for Chemistry showed the biggest difference between female and male candidates.
The bar chart gives information on the proportion of students who
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their exams at high school, by
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who
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exams is higher in most
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period. It is
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achieve the highest pass
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in computer science, and Mathematics for boys.

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girls
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their computer science exam recording 56. 3% pass
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was the highest
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among all the
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, followed by Mathematics at 49. 2%. There was a huge difference by approximately 14. 2% between the
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for
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. As mentioned, the pass
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for mathematics exams was the second highest
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for
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marking about 49. 2%, while the
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recorded about 48. 4%. This
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was the highest pass
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despite the gender
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languages exam. About 47. 4% of female
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the exam, while about 46. 8% of the
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the exam.

As far as the pass
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for the Geography exam
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for both genders.
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this exam. This
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for
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was the lowest
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between all the other
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recorded about 14. 1% of pass
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which was the lowest
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, whereas around 10% of
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for Chemistry
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the biggest difference between female and male
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

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