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the bar chart below shows the percentage of people who eat five portions of fruits and in the UK vegetables per day from 2001 to 2008.

the bar chart below shows the percentage of people who eat five portions of fruits and in the UK vegetables per day from 2001 to 2008. 6jW0
The chart gives information about the percentages of 3 groups(Men, Women, and Children) who ate vegetables and fruit 5 times a day in United Kingdom from 2001 until 2008. In general, throughout the years, women ate more fruit and vegetables than men and children. Alternatively, the groups of children ate the least amount of fruits and veggies among others. In 2002-2003, the percentages of women increased significantly by over 5%, whereas, the number of children & men who ate veggies and fruit remained the same number at 12% and 17% respectively. However, in 2004-2006 the number of children and men started to increasing gradually. While the women's reached its peak in 2006 by considerably more than 30%. On the other hand, in 2007 the percentages of women started to slightly decreasing. The group of men remained the same, although, the children increased and hit exactly 25%. Moreover in 2008, all of the groups decreased by 1-2%.
The chart gives information about the percentages of 3 groups(
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Men
,
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Women
, and
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Children)
who
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ate
vegetables and
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fruit
5 times a day
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in United Kingdom
from 2001 until 2008.

In general
, throughout the years,
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women
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ate
more
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fruit
and vegetables than
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men
and
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children
.
Alternatively
, the groups of
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children
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ate
the least amount of
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fruits
and veggies among others.

In 2002-2003, the percentages of
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women
increased
significantly
by over 5%, whereas, the number of
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children
&
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men
who
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ate
veggies and
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fruit
remained the same number at 12% and 17%
respectively
.

However
, in 2004-2006 the number of
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children
and
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men
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started
to increasing
gradually
.
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While
the women's reached its peak in 2006 by
considerably
more than 30%.

On the other hand
, in 2007 the percentages of
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women
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started
to
slightly
decreasing. The group of
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men
remained the same, although, the
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children
increased and hit exactly 25%.
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Moreover
in 2008,
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all of the
groups decreased by 1-2%.
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IELTS academic the bar chart below shows the percentage of people who eat five portions of fruits and in the UK vegetables per day from 2001 to 2008.

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