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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 9Jbx
The diagram illustrates the composition of Australia’s people in both sexes distinguished by age ranges conducting physical activity on a regular basis in 2010. Overall, the trend of Australian women who did sport-related activity rose steadily as they grew older until the peak point in 45-54 group before slightly turned down started from fifty-five years old. On the other hand, the tendency in men groups gave the opposite direction. Even though the younger groups were more active, the pattern showed the declination until the mid-30 until early 40 age groups. However, the men’s fact indicated the quite huge inclination to the older than 65 group. To the more detail, the histogram illustrates the plateau condition in female groups from age 35 to 64 which stated by value approximately 53%. From that point, the trend started to downgrade for about six percent in the middle sixty and older groups. Otherwise, in the male sphere, they were very active in their teenager-young adult group as showed by slighter than 50% of the total population. However, they reached the lowest percentage in the 35-44 age group as noted by approximately 40%. This depicted the significantly opposite pattern compared to the female groups in the same old range which are constituted by its 52. 5% of the whole group member.
The diagram illustrates the composition of Australia’s
people
in both sexes distinguished by
age
ranges conducting physical activity on a regular basis in 2010.

Overall
, the trend of Australian women who did sport-related activity rose
steadily
as they grew older until the peak point in 45-54
group
before
slightly
turned down
started
from fifty-five years
old
.
On the other hand
, the tendency in
men
groups
gave the opposite direction.
Even though
the younger
groups
were more active, the pattern
showed
the declination until the mid-30 until early 40
age
groups
.
However
, the
men
’s fact indicated the quite huge inclination to the older than 65 group.

To the more detail, the histogram illustrates the plateau condition in female
groups
from
age
35 to 64 which stated by value approximately 53%. From that point, the trend
started
to downgrade for about six percent in the middle sixty and older
groups
.
Otherwise
, in the male sphere, they were
very
active in their
teenager
-young adult
group
as
showed
by slighter than 50% of the total population.
However
, they reached the lowest percentage in the 35-44
age
group
as noted by approximately 40%. This depicted the
significantly
opposite pattern compared to the female
groups
in the same
old
range which
are constituted
by its 52. 5% of the whole
group
member.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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