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The bar chart below shows the market share of 4 supermarket in the US

The bar chart below shows the market share of 4 supermarket in the US O6NRd
The given bar chart indicates the number of market share's percent in 4 supermarket in the US namely Alton, Bestway, Foodhall and Finco. In general, the Finco supermarket always leads in market share in 1995, 2005 and 2015 with 20%, 30% and 28% respectively. While this figure in Bestway is the lowest with 5%, 12%, 14%. And there are hardly any changes in the number of market share's percent in Foodhall As can be seen from the chart, the market share of Finco supermarket in 2005 was almost twice as much as the figure for Bestway supermarket. It was even four times as much as the figure in 1995 and the market share of Bestway supermarket just was half as much as the figure for Finco supermarket in 2015For Foodhall supermarket, the change is negligible between years but when we compare it with Finco supermarket and Bestway, the number of market share's percent in Foodhall is still higher than Bestway but it is also smaller than the figure for Finco about a half
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supermarket
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Bestway
,
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Foodhall
and
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Finco
.
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, the
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Finco
supermarket always leads in
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share in 1995, 2005 and 2015 with 20%, 30% and 28%
respectively
. While this
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figure
in
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Bestway
is the lowest with 5%, 12%, 14%. And there are hardly any
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changes
in the number of
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market
share's percent in
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Foodhall
As can be
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seen
from the chart, the
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share of
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Finco
supermarket in 2005 was almost twice as much as the
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figure
for
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Bestway
supermarket. It was even four times as much as the
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in 1995 and the
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share of
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Bestway
supermarket
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was half as much as the
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Finco
supermarket in 2015For
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supermarket, the
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is negligible between years
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when we compare it with
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Finco
supermarket and
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Bestway
, the number of
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Foodhall
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higher than
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smaller than the
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about a
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the market share of 4 supermarket in the US

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