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The bar chart below shows favourite leisure activities of teenagers in canada by gendet

The bar chart below shows favourite leisure activities of teenagers in canada by gendet lW3dD
The bar chart gives information about favorite activities in the free time of youngsters in Canada includes boys and girls. In general, there are more boys keen on leisure activities than girls. On the one hand, music is the name of activity which teenagers like the most. The percentage of boys who are interested in listening to music is similar to the girls which are around 18%. Besides that, a slightly difference happened in the number of boys and girls who like playing computer games with over 15 percent of boys and less than 15% of girlsOn the other hand, there is a significant difference in the proportion of the two genders in shopping. Going shopping is liked by 35% of boys in comparison to more than 5% of girls. In addition, 25% is the number of boys whose favorite leisure activity is doing sport whilst the percentage of girls who like sport is more than 10%.
The bar chart gives information about favorite
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in the free time of youngsters in Canada includes
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boys
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girls
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boys
keen on leisure
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activities
than
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girls
. On the one hand, music is the name of
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activity
which
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teenagers
like the most. The percentage of
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boys
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are interested
in listening to music is similar to the
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girls
which are around 18%.
Besides
that, a
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slightly difference
happened in the number of
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boys
and
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girls
who like playing computer games with over 15 percent of
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boys
and less than 15% of
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girlsOn
the other hand, there is a significant difference in the proportion of the two genders in shopping. Going shopping
is liked
by 35% of
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boys
in comparison
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girls
.
In addition
, 25% is the number of
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boys
whose favorite leisure
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activity
is doing sport whilst the percentage of
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girls
who like sport is more than 10%.
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