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The assigned pie charts elucidate the information about the utilization of current by the people of Japan for different purposes in their homes during a day in two seasons winter and summer.

The assigned pie charts elucidate the information about the utilization of current by the people of Japan for different purposes in their homes during a day in two seasons winter and summer. k5bNK
The assigned line graph elucidate the information about the utilization of current by the people of Japan for different purposes and in their homes during a day in two seasons winter and summer. To begin with, Japanese people use electronic current for the heating rooms and for hot water accounted as 45% in winter season however, in summer only 5% electricity is consumed for the purpose of heating rooms and water. Moving on lighting. , TV, Radio and PC avarage consumption of power in Japan observed as 25% in winter but in summer season 35% electricity used for same purpose. It have shown more than 10% comparison to winter season. On further scrutiny, in case of Desert, coolers, AC Japanese person used 30% electricity in summer. In winter season same amount of electricity used for the same purpose in Japan. Turning to next stage, people used electricity has accounted for 28% for kitchen and other household gadgets in winter season. However, 30%electronic current is utilized for the purpose of kitchen and other household gadgets in summer season. Overall, it has been observed that maximum electricity is used for the purpose of heating rooms and water in winter. Minimum electricity is used for the same type of work in summer.
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for the heating rooms and for hot water accounted as 45% in
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IELTS academic The assigned pie charts elucidate the information about the utilization of current by the people of Japan for different purposes in their homes during a day in two seasons winter and summer.

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