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The two pie charts demonstrates the percentage of dosmetic energy consumption for serveral purpose and how proportion of greenhouse is emitted in an average Australian household. According to the first chart, about 42% of energy consumed in an Australian family for heating, which is the highest quantities. The figure for water-heating is slightly lower, at around 30% whereas the percentage of other appliances stands less than a fifth and the others including cooling, lighting and refrigeration at under 7%. In comparison, water-heating and other appliances are the major of greenhouse gas emissions with about 32% and 28% respectively. Heating in this case went up dramatically from 42% to 15%. Consuming lighting and refrigeration are similar change which is a double in comparison with itself in household energy usage. Similarly, 3% of emissions are caused by cooling and 8% of those are produced by lighting which occupy the higher figures than they are used. In conclusion, most energy is used for heating but the most significant emissions are released by water-heating and other appliances. While cooling is not as considerable as others in both charts.

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serveral
 purpose and how proportion of greenhouse is emitted
 in an average Australian household.

According to the first
 chart, about 42% of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstrengthtoughnesspowervitalitystaminaefficiency
energy
 consumed in an Australian family for heating, which is the highest quantities. The figure for water-heating is slightly
 lower, at around 30% whereas the percentage of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 appliances stands less than a fifth and the others including cooling, lighting and refrigeration at under 7%.

In comparison
, water-heating and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 appliances are the major of greenhouse gas emissions with about 32% and 28% respectively
. Heating in this case
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 which is a double in comparison
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energy
 usage. Similarly
, 3% of emissions are caused
 by cooling and 8% of those are produced
 by lighting which occupy the higher figures than they are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
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In conclusion
, most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstrengthtoughnesspowervitalitystaminaefficiency
energy
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used
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but
 the most significant emissions are released
 by water-heating and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 appliances. “While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
 cooling is not as considerable as others in both charts. 