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The above line chart represents the number of tourists visiting Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003.

This graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003. Overall it shows that more tourists visited Malaysia from 1995 to 2000 but afterwards Dubai had more visitors. Going into details, in 1995, 100 thousand tourists visited Malaysia and it was double the number of tourists in Dubai at the same time. The next year, the number of tourists in Malaysia increased while in Dubai it remained the same. Then the number of tourists in Malaysia and Dubai increased rapidly and in 1998, 200 thousand people visited Malaysia in comparison to over 150 thousand in Dubai. From 1998 to 1999, Malaysia showed a huge increase in the number of tourists and reached quarter million visitors while in Dubai there was a slight decrease. But in 2000 both countries have reached over quarter million. Next year, they witnessed an enormous rise in the tourists’ number and stood at about 325 thousand. Then a reverse trend happened during the next years with a higher number of tourists in Dubai than in Malaysia. In 2003, 0. 4 million visitors went to Dubai, a dramatic rise compared to that of 1995, while Malaysia attracted fewer than 250 thousand tourists which was 2. 5 times than that of 1995.
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Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003.

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that more
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Malaysia from 1995 to 2000
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afterwards Dubai had more visitors. Going into
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, in 1995, 100 thousand
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Malaysia and
it was double the
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in Dubai at the same time. The
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in Malaysia increased while in Dubai it remained the same. Then the
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in Malaysia and Dubai increased
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and in 1998, 200 thousand
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to over 150 thousand in Dubai. From 1998 to 1999, Malaysia
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a huge increase in the
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and reached quarter million visitors while in Dubai there was a slight decrease.
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in 2000 both countries have reached over quarter million.
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year, they witnessed an enormous rise in the
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and stood at about 325 thousand. Then a reverse trend happened during the
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years with a higher
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in Dubai than in Malaysia. In 2003, 0. 4 million visitors went to Dubai, a dramatic rise compared to that of 1995, while Malaysia attracted fewer than 250 thousand
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which was 2. 5 times than that of 1995.

IELTS academic The above line chart represents the number of tourists visiting Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003.

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