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Task 1: about using car, train and bus

Task 1: about using car, train and bus PE132
This line chart shows the UK commuters traveling numbers each day by car, bus or train from 1970 to 2030. It is clear from the graph that traveling by the car most used than train and bus. According to what is shown, in 1970 the people who are using train to travel appxtromately 2. 5 millions, and the number still continues to grow up with a simple percentage, in 2010 the train line intersection with bus line to show us that increase of the numbers of train passengers and drop of people who used the bus. While the numbers of people who used the cars it high since 1970, the number of users has reached 5. 5 million, but the line stopped between 1980 and 2000, after this years that line jumped to continuously to get the high number of users in 2030 to become 9 million. To sum up, we could say that the car is the most means of transport is using, on the contrary of train and bus.
This
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line
chart
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shows
the UK commuters traveling
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numbers
each day by
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car
, bus or
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train
from 1970 to 2030. It is
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clear
from the graph that traveling by the
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car
most
Use "(used)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
used
than
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train
and bus.

According to what
is shown
, in 1970 the
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people
who are using
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train
Did you mean "traveling", "travelling"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to travel
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appxtromately
2. 5 millions, and the
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number
still
continues to grow up with a simple percentage, in 2010 the
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train
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line
intersection with bus
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line
to
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show
us that increase of the
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numbers
of
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train
passengers and drop of
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people
who
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used
the bus.

While the
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numbers
of
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people
who
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used
the
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cars
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it
high since 1970, the
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number
of users has reached 5. 5 million,
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but
the
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line
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stopped
between 1980 and 2000, after
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this years
that
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line
jumped to
continuously
to
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get
the high
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number
of users in 2030 to become 9 million.

To sum up, we could say that the
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car
is the most means of transport is using,
on the contrary
of
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train
and bus.
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IELTS academic Task 1: about using car, train and bus

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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