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Sunshine hours of the city of New York,London and Sydeny.The total amount is given ialong with the line graps.organize this line graps and summaraise the details of the line graps

Sunshine hours of the city of New York, London and Sydeny. The total amount is given ialong with the line graps. organize this line graps and summaraise the details of the line graps VPaOD
In the above line graph. three lines represent the city of London, New York, and Sydneys sunshine hours on monthly basis. Furthermore, total amount is also mentioned. Overall, the city of New York and London showing upward trends and end with downward trend till mid jully and then go upward and end with where it start around 25 hours. Firstly, if we are taking consideration of the overall upward trend of the city London and New York we experienced that, at the beginning of January it will be started approximately between four to eight hours range. In between February and march, it will give a general trend of increase but at the mid of the march to the end of October, it will trend to stunning increase. where we viewed the apex in the mid of July. Consequently, the total amount of yearly daylight of The London and New York are 1180 and 2535 hours sequentially. In addition, if we scrutinize the line graph the city of Sydney will follow a steady character at the beginning to the mid of the march but after that, we will find a general trend of degradation towards at the mid of the July which showed well above 15 hours of Sunshine. However, after that, we will experience a drastic increase till the mid of November which indicates the point of Sunshine at slightly below 25 hours. Then it will be shown a compact position and end with approximately 25 hours at the month of December. As a result, the total hour of Sunshine is twelve months was approximately about 2473 hours.
In the above line graph.
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three
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city of London
,
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New
York, and
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Sydneys
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sunshine
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hours
on monthly basis.
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mentioned.
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, the city of
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New
York and London showing upward
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trends
and
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end
with downward
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trend
till mid
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jully
and then go upward and
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end
with where it
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start
around 25
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hours
.
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, if we are taking consideration of the
overall
upward
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trend
of the city London and
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New
York we experienced that, at the beginning of January it will be
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started
approximately
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range. In between February and march, it will give a general
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trend
of increase
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at the mid of the march to the
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end
of October, it will
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trend
to stunning increase.
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where
we viewed the apex in the mid of July.
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, the total amount of yearly daylight of The London and
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New
York are 1180 and 2535
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hours
sequentially
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, if we scrutinize the line graph the city of Sydney will follow a steady character at the beginning to the mid of the march
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but
after that, we will find a general
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trend
of degradation towards at the mid of the July which
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showed
well above 15
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hours
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Sunshine
.
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, after that, we will experience a drastic increase till the mid of November which indicates the point of
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Sunshine
at
slightly
below 25
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hours
. Then it will
be shown
a compact position and
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end
with approximately 25
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hours
at the month of December.
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, the total
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hour
of
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Sunshine
is twelve months was
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approximately about
2473
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hours
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IELTS academic Sunshine hours of the city of New York, London and Sydeny. The total amount is given ialong with the line graps. organize this line graps and summaraise the details of the line graps

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