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SUMMARISES THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE COMPARISON WHERE RELEVANT v.2

SUMMARISES THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE COMPARISON WHERE RELEVANT v. 2
The diagram illustrates the radio and television audiences in the UK throughout the day in December 1992. Overall, the television and radio audiences was erratic. It fluctuated irregularly from noon to midnight. The television audiences moved up and down strongly. The trend was obviously upward from 6 a. m to 2 p. m. Between 4 p. m and 12 a. m, the figure reached its highest level with 45 % of UK population. After this time, the figure nose – dived dramatically with 2 % at 3 a. m. The radio audiences went up initually and plunged considerably at the end. The figure had a slight growth and leaped to a new peak at 8 p. m with 28 %. However, it went into free fall steadily in the last time. The figure felt back to the lowest level with 4 %. In conclusion, the line graph witnessed the television and radio audiences in the UK throughout the day in December 1992.
The diagram illustrates the
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radio
and
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television
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audiences
in the UK throughout the day in December 1992.

Overall
, the
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television
and
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radio
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audiences
was erratic. It fluctuated
irregularly
from noon to midnight.

The
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television
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audiences
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moved
up and down
strongly
. The trend was
obviously
upward from 6 a. m to 2 p. m. Between 4 p. m and 12 a. m, the
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figure
reached its highest level with 45 % of UK population. After this time, the
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figure
nose
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–
dived
dramatically
with 2 % at 3 a. m.

The
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radio
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audiences
went up
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initually
and plunged
considerably
at the
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end
. The
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figure
had a slight growth and leaped to a new peak at 8 p. m with 28 %.
However
, it went into free fall
steadily
in the last time. The
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figure
felt back to the lowest level with 4 %.

In conclusion
, the line graph witnessed the
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television
and
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radio
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audiences
in the UK throughout the day in December 1992.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic SUMMARISES THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE COMPARISON WHERE RELEVANT v. 2

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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