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staff hired for the company

staff hired for the company lWAao
the line graph represent information about percentage of staff recruited in the company over a 10 years period. overall the graph shows a decrease for the percentage of staff hired between 1997 to 2006 plus. according to the graph the recruitment percentage decreased between 1997 all almost 1999-2000 and fall sharply between year 2000 and 2002 then it became stable during the period of time between 2002 to 2006 plus.
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the
line graph represent information about percentage of staff recruited in the
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company
over a 10 years period.
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overall
the graph
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shows
a decrease for the percentage of staff hired
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 1997 and 2006".
between 1997 to 2006
plus.
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according
to the graph the recruitment percentage decreased between 1997 all almost 1999-2000 and fall
sharply
between year 2000 and 2002 then it became stable during the period of time
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 2002 and 2006".
between 2002 to 2006
plus.
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IELTS academic staff hired for the company

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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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