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women works as well as men nowadays, so some people say that men and women have to do household works equally. To what extent do you agree?

women works as well as men nowadays, so some people say that men and women have to do household works equally. 6xmVl
Nowadays, the majority of women tend to work as well as men in comparison with the past. According to this phenomenon, some people assert that men should do household works equally, while others profess household works are just women's jobs. I assume that to alleviate this phenomenon we should have the right awareness of household tasks and this would be a paramount way. To begin with, it is efficatious that household tasks are no longer women's jobs since women tend to work and they have no sufficient time to do household works by themselves without men's support. Recent research has shown the fact that tons of women suffer from house works. Because household tasks are grueling works and repititive. For instance, in Korea, tons of fathers take paternal leave to spend their time with children. This shows that spending time with children could help children's improvement. Fathers play an important role to rear their children. Therefore, parents should make a joint effort to mitigate this problem. On the other hand, I believe that split household tasks equally are difficult. However, parents should put their heads together to mitigate this phenomenon. In America, men treat house appliances, while women cleaning the room. They do house works according to the time table. This means that doing household works together would be helpful to both of them. In conclusion, It is clear that household works are tricky to separate samely. However, I strongly believe that modern people could do household works equally, meeting women and men's needs simultaneously.
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equally
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works are
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women's jobs. I assume that to alleviate this phenomenon we should have the right awareness of
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household
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tasks
and this would be a paramount way.

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efficatious
that
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household
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tasks
are no longer women's jobs since
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tend to
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work and
they have no sufficient
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time
to do
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works by themselves without
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men
's support. Recent research has shown the fact that tons of
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women
suffer from
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house
works.
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Because
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household
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tasks
are grueling works and
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repititive
.
For instance
, in Korea, tons of fathers take paternal
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leave
to spend their
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time
with children. This
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shows
that spending
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time
with children could
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help
children's improvement. Fathers play an
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important
role to rear their children.
Therefore
, parents should
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a joint effort to mitigate this problem.

On the other hand
, I believe that split
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household
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tasks
equally
are difficult.
However
, parents should put their heads together to mitigate this phenomenon. In America,
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men
treat
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appliances, while
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cleaning the room. They do
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house
works according to the
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time
table. This means that doing
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household
works together would be helpful to both of them.

In conclusion
, It is
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clear
that
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works are tricky to separate
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samely
.
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believe that modern
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works
equally
, meeting
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and
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's needs
simultaneously
.
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