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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion? Nrrmm
There is some truth of people saying music is the most virtuous way of gathering individuals from different lands and demographics. I strongly agree to this. This essay will discuss how it can bring peace between two arch-rivals and also as a viable profit generation source along with relevant examples to support my points. There is ample evidence that music is a billion dollar industry. Associating with artists from various backgrounds scales it up and open a plethora of opportunities. A chart-buster song in western country may not guarantee a success in eastern part of the world but when linked with a local artist, the reputation surges. To illustrate this, King of Pop Michael Jackson when collaborated with a South Asian composer, A. R Rahman, the song created ripples across the globe and is still the most downloaded song on the internet. Therefore it is conclusively clear that songs and tunes in fusion with different genre can generate higher revenue. Although it is profitable to team up with musicians from different background, the power of it being a uniting force cannot be understated. It erases boundaries and any existing animosity among countries and religions. For example, although there is a never ending tension between India and Pakistan, the musicians from the neighboring country are widely popular and have a star like following in the other country. Thus it is possible to state that Music is a powerful medium which has no language or boundaries. To sum up, composition of sounds and tunes have the unique capability of erasing hatred between two ethnicity and at same time be commercially successful when work jointly.
There is
some
truth of
people
saying music is the most virtuous way of gathering individuals from
different
lands and demographics. I
strongly
agree
to this. This essay will discuss how it can bring peace between two arch-rivals and
also
as a viable profit generation source along with relevant examples to support my points.

There is ample evidence that music is a billion dollar industry. Associating with artists from various backgrounds scales it up and open a plethora of opportunities. A chart-buster song in western
country
may not guarantee a success in eastern part of the world
but
when linked with a local artist, the reputation surges. To illustrate this, King of Pop Michael Jackson when collaborated with a South Asian composer, A. R Rahman, the song created ripples across the globe and is
still
the most downloaded song on the internet.
Therefore
it is
conclusively
clear
that songs and tunes in fusion with
different
genre can generate higher revenue.

Although it is profitable to team up with musicians from
different
background, the power of it being a uniting force cannot
be understated
. It erases boundaries and any existing animosity among
countries
and religions.
For example
, although there is a never ending tension between India and Pakistan, the musicians from the neighboring
country
are
widely
popular and have a star like following in the other
country
.
Thus
it is possible to state that Music is a powerful medium which has no language or boundaries.

To sum up, composition of sounds and tunes have the unique capability of erasing hatred between two ethnicity and at same time be
commercially
successful when work
jointly
.
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IELTS academic Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. with this opinion?

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