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Sample Answer of The Diagram Below Shows The Steps of Processing Cocoa Beans

Sample Answer of The Diagram Below Shows The Steps of Processing Cocoa Beans x086o

The yielded diagram demonstrates the processing of cocoa beans. Overall, it can be clearly seen that this process is divided into three steps from collecting beans to distribute them to consumers. In the first step, the process begins with pickup whole beans from the field later differ from their shells and dry under sunlight. In the next step, pressing dried beans and make cocoa liquor. The next stage of the process is divided into two parts. If it was pressing further, it makes cocoa and cocoa cake, whereas another is that industrial chocolates after refining and adding sugar and cocoa. I’m the last and third step, after griding cocoa cake, it makes cocoa powder which also makes from industrial cakes drinks. In the following stage, cocoa powder distributes to consumers. Further processing on industrial chocolate output is chocolate products that go straight to consumers.

The yielded diagram demonstrates the processing of cocoa beans.

Overall
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 that this process is divided
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steps
 from collecting beans to distribute them to consumers.

In the first
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step
, the process This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatescommences
begins
 with pickup whole beans from the field later differ from their shells and dry under sunlight. In the next
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step
, pressing dried beans and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanufacturecomposeprepareformproducecause
make
 cocoa liquor. The next
 stage of the process is divided
 into two parts. If it was pressing further
, it You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanufacturecomposeprepareformproducecause
makes
 cocoa and cocoa cake, whereas another is that industrial chocolates after refining and adding sugar and cocoa.

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step
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griding
 cocoa cake, it You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmanufacturecomposeprepareformproducecause
makes
 cocoa powder which also
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makes
 from industrial cakes drinks. In the following stage, cocoa powder distributes to consumers. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Further,
Further
 processing on industrial chocolate output is chocolate products that go straight to consumers. 