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The line graph illustrates the proportion of British contemporary technology modified patterns in households. First of all, The CD player was the most accessible than any other technology. For instancmobilee, 46% was the percentage in 1994. It was the oldest approachable than other automotive engineering. It rose gradually until 86% in 2005 whereas it slightly decreased in 2005 to 2008. While, a phone, an internet connection and a DVD player were accessed in 1996, 1998 and 2002 respectively. The internet connection steadily increased from 9% in 1998 to 65% in 2008. Another point to mention was the proportion of mobile phones. It fluctuated wildly. However, the trend was upward. The highest percentage was 79% in 2005 and then levelled off. In addition, It gradually fluctuated after 2006. A final point was the DVD player was 30% in 2002. It climbed suddenly until 2005 and then steadily grew up after 2005. Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of communication technology that was the most accessible was the CD player. Moreover, it was the oldest approachable technology since 1994.

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player
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technology
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, 46% was the percentage in 1994. It was the oldest Use "(approachable)" to make a comparison with this adjective.(approachable)
approachable
 than other automotive engineering. It rose gradually
 until 86% in 2005 whereas it slightly
 decreased in 2005 to 2008.

While, a phone, an internet connection and a DVD You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompetitorathleteparticipantmemberrookieprofessional
player
were accessed
 in 1996, 1998 and 2002 respectively
. The internet connection steadily
 increased from 9% in 1998 to 65% in 2008. Another point to mention was the proportion of mobile phones. It fluctuated wildly
. However
, the trend was upward. The highest percentage was 79% in 2005 and then levelled off. In addition
, It gradually
 fluctuated after 2006. A final point was the DVD You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompetitorathleteparticipantmemberrookieprofessional
player
 was 30% in 2002. It climbed suddenly
 until 2005 and then steadily
 grew up after 2005.

Overall
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seen
 that the proportion of communication You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmachineryautomation
technology
 that was the most accessible was the CD You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompetitorathleteparticipantmemberrookieprofessional
player
. Moreover
, it was the oldest approachable You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmachineryautomation
technology
 since 1994. 