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PROCESS DIAGRAM: BRICK PRODUCTION

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A glance at the given diagrams illustrates the process of how bricks are created. Overall, it is patently obvious that there are seven prominent stages in this process, initiating with digging the clay and culminating in delivering the products. At the first stage of the process, clay from the ground is dug up by a big digger. The next step begins when the clay is broken up into small pieces by a metal grid and moved away by a roller. The clay is then mixed with sand and water before putting in a wire cutter or mould to shape the bricks. Subsequently, the raw bricks are dried in a drying oven for 24 to 48 hours. Following this is the heating of raw bricks in a kiln from moderate( 200oC to 980oC) to high temperature( 870oC to 1300oC). Next, the bricks are refrigerated in a cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours Coming to the final stages of the process, finished bricks are packed and prepared to transfer. Finally, the bricks are loaded on the transport car and delivered to the customers.
A glance at the
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given
diagrams illustrates the
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process
of how
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bricks
are created
.

Overall
, it is
patently
obvious that there are seven prominent stages in this
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process
, initiating with digging the
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clay
and culminating in delivering the products.

At the
first
stage of the
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process
,
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clay
from the ground
is dug
up by a
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big
digger. The
next
step
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begins
when the
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clay
is broken
up into
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small
pieces by a metal grid and
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moved
away by a roller. The
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clay
is then mixed with sand and water
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before
putting in a wire cutter or
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mould
to shape the
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bricks
.
Subsequently
, the raw
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bricks
are dried
in a drying oven for 24 to 48 hours. Following this is the heating of raw
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bricks
in a kiln from moderate
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(
200oC to 980oC) to high temperature
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(
870oC to 1300oC).
Next
, the
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bricks
are refrigerated
in a cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours Coming to the final stages of the
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process
, finished
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bricks
are packed
and prepared to transfer.
Finally
, the
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bricks
are loaded
on the transport car and delivered to the customers.
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IELTS academic PROCESS DIAGRAM: BRICK PRODUCTION

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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