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These pie charts illustrate the percentage of funds allocation to seven given items in 1966 and 1996, for the United States. Firstly, in year 1966, maximum usage is in food sector, this is of forty-four percentage followed by cars twenty-three percentage, moreover, consumption in petrol, restaurants and furniture each one is at approximately ten percentage shares. While books are only at six percentage. The least utilization is in computers due to less impact and availability of technology in that era. On the other hand, in year 1996, this figure majorly changes with enormous enhancement in cars and restaurants, which doubled from sales in 1966 and the food area is declined by thirty percentage in whole value. However, not only petrol, but furniture also did not affect that much, there is a slight declination of one and two percentage respectively. There is huge fluctuation in books and computers region, only be caused by the sophisticated development, result in plunging book at one percentage from six percentage and inclination in computers from one percentage to ten percentage. Overall, from above mentioned description, it has been found that there is a significant alteration in cuisine and technology industry over the period of given thirty years.
These pie charts illustrate the
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of funds allocation to seven
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items in 1966 and 1996, for the United States.

Firstly
, in year 1966, maximum usage is in food sector, this is of forty-four
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followed by cars twenty-three
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,
moreover
, consumption in petrol, restaurants and furniture each one is at approximately ten
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shares.
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. The least utilization is in computers due to less impact and availability of technology in that era.

On the other hand
, in year 1996, this figure
majorly
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changes
with enormous enhancement in cars and restaurants, which doubled from sales in 1966 and the food area
is declined
by thirty
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in whole value.
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, not
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petrol,
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furniture
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did not affect that much, there is a slight declination of one and two
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respectively
. There is huge fluctuation in books and computers region,
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be caused
by the sophisticated development, result in plunging book at one
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from six
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and inclination in computers from one
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to ten percentage.

Overall
, from above mentioned description, it has
been found
that there is a significant alteration in cuisine and technology industry over the period of
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thirty years.
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